All right, here's the contestents:

pbdeberry
Rokk_Krinn
daniel_wr
JGonspy
Concherto
deadshot042
biz567
Kalel21

And here's the challenge:

Write a 500 word or less pitch for a one-shot book about one of the following:

1. A What If? story set in the DC Universe
2. A story where a villain decisively defeats his or her foe set in the Marvel universe

The deadline is this Monday, or when all submissions are in, whichever comes first.

Just one question, and I should have asked this in the other thread:

Should it be an explanation of what the story is, or actual quotes and what not of what the characters will say? Like, here are the two things I'm talking about:

1)Spiderman will swing down, fight the Rhino, lose.(Of course, there would be a lot more detail in this!)

2)Rhino:Your done Spidey.
Spidey:No you are.(Again, this is just being simple!)

Sorry if this has been answered.

Wait, I actually got entered into this? Teaches me to mock Jack...

Ah well, it should be good for getting back into writing habits.

It's s storyline summary. You can have snippets of script if you want, but the essence is the general plotline. In other words, it's a lot more number 1 than number 2.

Heck, I saw your post and I thought you'd entered. Oh, well, no backing out now!

WHAT IF BANE KILLED THE BATMAN...?

We all know that master criminal Bane frees the inmates of Arkham Asylum. Forcing Batman to single handily recapture some of Gotham's deadliest villains, such as Joker, Scarecrow and the Mad Hatter. Slowly wearing the Dark Knight down, leaving him dangerously tired and making him an easy target for Bane.

We know that the final confrontation between Batman and Bane, left the Caped Crusader with a broken back and Gotham with a new Dark Knight an unlikely hero named Azrael (Jean-Paul Valley.)

Well...

What if Bane had killed The Batman?

The Pitch:

With the Batman dead, Robin sets out to find Bane on his own, but before Robin can confront Bane (atop Wayne Towers.) Azrael appears and attacks Robin, nearly beating him to death. (It's later learned that Azrael reasoned that the only way to prevent Robin from getting killed is if he was totally incapacitated.) Pleased with the way things turned out Bane challenges Azrael. Bane overconfident, unaware that Azrael had booby-trapped Wayne Towers. Charges Azrael, using his superior strength (thanks to the venom) manages to take hold of Azrael and tosses him off of Wayne Towers. Bane watches Azrael fall, but grows suspicious when Azrael doesn't save himself right away, instead he continues to tumble towards the streets below. Then it occurs to him, Azrael is holding something (detonator) and before he can react the roof top explodes.

After his unprovoked attack on Robin and nearly destroying Wayne Towers, Nightwing confronts the delusional Valley beneath Wayne Manor, where they fight, neither one giving an inch, until Nightwing finally gains an advantage, thanks to Alfred, with Azrael beaten, Nightwing rips the Bat-suit from Jean-Paul's beaten body and declares. "I've known Bruce Wayne for a long time and I've never known him to make a mistakes, but he made TWO mistakes. The first was facing Bane alone. The other thinking that YOU could replace him as The Batman."

Bane killed, Azrael defeated and tucked away in Arkham Asylum. D ick Grayson (Nightwing),Tim Drake (Robin), and a who's who of DC heroes (Superman, Aquaman, Wonder Woman) pay there last respects to a fallen hero, The Batman. We bring the story to an end with the bat-signal blazing overhead. Alfred looking to D ick and says "Gotham needs its Batman" and hands D ick the cape and cowl.

Thanks Jack!

Hmm, I have no clue what to do.:erm:

Knowing me, it'll be Spiderman, lol.

Well, there goes my idea. It seems the world will have to wait to hear the tale of Spider-Man being defeated by the Big Wheel. Oh well, maybe I'll whip something together involving the Daredevil or something.

Hey, if you really want to use Spidey, you can! I have plenty of other characters I can choose from.

Hydra defeating Jessica Drew...Maybe..

Nah, I was just joking around. I want to save Spidey for another round in this thing. I've got a few other ideas floating around my head.

Can we suggest ideas for the next rounds though? Like maybe making a story for a character everyone hates? (soon Sentry...soon!)

Here's my pitch:

A DC WHAT IF STORY PROPOSAL:

When young Bruce Wayne sees his parents killed, he swears to avenge them and dedicates his life to training both his mind and his body to perfection. But as the years go by, he gradually becomes arrogant about his abilities, coming to consider himself the natural superior to the common man. By the time he reaches adulthood, he has come to consider the man who killed his parents (and who set him on the path of superiority) to be his true “father.”

Bruce returns to Gotham City, where he creates the identity of Batman and takes over the underworld, ruling over the common criminals with an iron fist. His butler Alfred is wracked with guilt, but still supports him out of loyalty to the Wayne family.

Soon, Batman meets Joe Chill and recognizes him as his “father.” The surprised Chill is made second-in-command of the underworld operations. But Chill is terrified of Batman, who kills his minions for making the least mistakes (thus showing signs of unacceptable “inferiority.”) Chill begins to make plans to assassinate Batman and take over as head crook.

At first, Commissioner Gordon is overwhelmed by Batman’s crime wave. But soon he gets help from two directions. First, Alfred, his conscience finally trumping his loyalty to the Waynes (at least to a degree), assumes the persona of the Riddler and feeds the police clues to Batman’s activities in the form of riddles.

Second, a private eye whose wife was murdered by Batman fights the crime lord but is thrown into a vat of chemicals. His face is horribly deformed, but he uses his life savings and insurance money to continue the fight against Batman as Joker—the Crown Prince of Crime Stoppers.

Slowly, both the police and the Joker begin to make headway against Batman, breaking up several of his major criminal operations. Batman, enraged, begins to act even more ruthlessly towards his men, causing more of them to secretly join Joe Chill's upcoming coup attempt.

Everything comes to a head when Commissioner Gordon and the Joker, both following up their own lines of investigation, identify Batman as Bruce Wayne and simultaneously launch raids on the Batcave. At the same time, Joe Cool launches his assassination attempt against Batman. In the ensuing chaos, Riddler/Alfred is killed with a razor-sharp batarang. Joe Chill is crushed under the giant penny. Joker captures Batman and the police round up or kill the rest of the gang. Batman, betrayed by both Alfred and his “father,” has gone completely nuts. Screaming and drooling, he’s dragged off to Arkham Asylum.

And Here's my pitch.

A story where a villain decisively defeats his or her foe set in the Marvel universe

Daredevil V Bullseye (working title)

The story opens with a large splash page with the body of an unknown man...crucified. The eyes of the body have been covered with a blood stained blindfold, the man's shirt ripped open and the logo of Daredevil (the two overlapping D's) carved into his chest the bloody slowly trickling down towards his trousers.

The cross and body is laid upon the steps of the of the New York courts, a clear message to the man with no fear. It would be night but the body and sign indicting the location would be illuminated by street lights.

So we move on to the story as such...

The SHRA is out to get Murdock and Tony Stark knows just how to push the man without fear to his absolute limits. Bullseye has been let loose by the Thunderbolt and his sights are set on only one man. Set over one day and night and only one comic issue it is the hunt and death of Matt Murdock.

It starts with Matt Murdock finding the Bullseye's calling card sprawled not only across the papers but his work, but the fingers aren’t pointing in the right direction, well not for Matt. In an age where the hero is hunted, the Daredevil is put firmly in the firing line...but it’s not DD there after, no its Mr Matt Murdock.

Matt makes it to the door of the court, surrounded by press and police; he places his hand on the door. Bang. His hand is impaled, a nail straight through the door and more importantly his hand. The next page/ panel would be from the view point of Matt, a page right through his eyes. It would show Bullseye stood hand raised as if throwing a dart, but it isn't a straight image, as the image would be through Matt's echoloisation (sp) there would be the distorted images of people (most likely the aforementioned Cops and Press). The next image would be the same shot...except not from Matt’s viewpoint from the normal view point and it shows, yes the image of Bullseye in the distance but it would be through the heads of 3 people. Let me explain the nail would have passed through 3 victims before getting to matt, the holes left would reveal Bullseye stood in the holes...ala James Bond.

Sorry for straying but it’s the details that makes the story.

Matt rips his hand from the door and begins the chase, crashing through the crowed, we see him ripping of his shirt to reveal his costume. The chase continues through a series of streets and ally ways, Matt always four steps behind. The pair cross a major road in New York (sorry for lack of road description but never been and don't intend to before finishing this... ). Bullseye turns and throws what can only be assumed is another nail. The nail why not hitting DD blows the tire of an oncoming taxi. The next few panel are in slow motion, we see DD bend and move...matrix style...to avoid the car which after hitting a couple of cars he become, if not fully, airborne. We see the car fly over DD with Matt flipping backward out the way as it passes above him.

Overwhelmed, DD is stuck between a rock and the hardest stone, save those who my get injured(...through out this we will see premonitions about what would happen if he took a certain root, i.e. the bystanders killed, himself killed, Bullseye standing over his body and mocking..) or go after Bullseye.

He makes the choice and...Rightly or wrongly choose to hunt the hunter. The pace returns to that of a chase, with Bullseye running, almost luring DD. Bullseye cuts into an alleyway and climbs a fire escape, the fight moves upwards. Daredevil flips up clambering over the edge. He looks up as he climbs over the edge only to see the penetrating smile of Bullseye. Bullseye kicks DD in the face, undignified yes but it works, the Daredevil hold on to the side by only his finger tips and palms (you'll see why later). When fully in Bullseye puts his full wait onto the nail and its driven into the brick. Matt’s pinned.

Another kick and the reader can see the nail tearing through the flesh and Matt tries to pull it out. Bullseye, bends down looks matt right in the eyes (see in both all three view pints, BE's DD's and audiences) and draws a final nail. He leans in and jams the nail into the side of matt’s eye socket. He pulls it out and jabs and jabs and jabs in both eyes, finally ripping the eyes out and throwing them over the edge. Throughout all this Matt’s screaming in pain and Bullseye getting more and more agressive and almost overly happy. The face of Murdock should be getting more and more blood splattered and should Bulleye's face. A really graphic end.

The final panel would see the daredevil left hanging of the edge. With the Bullseye walking away into the distance smiling.


thanks

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Jack - Before I forget to ask, when on Monday is the deadline to have submitted?

Oh, I'd say midnight. You've got the full Monday till your coach turns into a pumpkin.

Does anybody know where I can get a word counter somewhere?

Oh never mind, I found one. Turns out mine is about 834 words.