Hey, check out this deck.

Monsters:14
Manticore of Darkness x2
Emissary of the Afterlife x1
Exodia setx5
Nimble Momongas x3
UFO turtlex1
Giant Rat x2
Magics:18
Pot of greedx1
Card of safe Returnx3
Premature Burial
Reloadx2
Messange of peacex2
Monster Reincarnationx2
Dark factory of mass production x2
Level Limit area B
Upstart goblin
Change of heart
Painful choice
Swords of revealing Light

Traps:8
Jar of greed
Gravity Bind
CEDevice x3
Magical Hats
Backup Soldier x2

Anyone? Please? not even one commment? please?..........................

8/10.........i really like it i like to see manticure of darkness....such a cool card! personally i'm not one for magical hats!!!!!so maybe take it out and put in another gravity bind.....the dark door is also good....maybe 3 gravity binds and 3 des lacuda(take out the nimble mongoma)

LOL how original? =P Try some Monster Gates in this deck... speed up the process of getting the Manticore, the faster you can perform the FTK/OTK, the better.

Ok........ first off......... im not really sure where your going with the UFO Turtle....... you only got 1 and I dont see any other fire monsters besides Manticore, which aren't searchable by UFO's effect........ I really gotta dissapoint you a bit here, but I really see that this deck needs a bit of improvement......
- UFO Turtle
- Card of Safe Return (to get all 3 on the field at once youd have to depend to much on the magical hats combo, its just to slow)
- CEDevice
- Jar of Greed
- Change of Heart (as much as I love this card, theres really no sense on stealing a monster from your opp in this deck)

+ 2 Dragged Down into the Grave
+ 3 Giant Germs
Well I hope I helped you out a bit........... ;)

Yeah, in oticed the UFO turtle thing when i was writing it. I like your changes, but...... for the Card of safe return one, i have 3 so i know i wont have trouble drawing it