I need some constructive Criticism,

Monsters:23
Invader of Darkness
Blowback dragon
The Fiend Megacyber
Byser Shock
Pitch-Black Warwolf x3
twin-headed wolf x2
Mystic Tomato x2
Winged Minion x2
Kryuel x2
Magician of Faith x3
Night assailant x2
Grave Protector
Goblin King
Sangan

Spell:12
Pot of greed
Nobleman of crossout x2
United We Stand
Reload x2
Dark Core
The Dark Door
Yami
Mask of The Accursed
Creature swap x2

Trap:10
Draining Sheild x2
The Spell Absorbing Life
Divine Wrath x2
Sakaretsu Armor x2
Raigeki break x2
Spell Vanishing

Total:45

I'm using the new OCG ban list because, i'm taking a break from dueling until it becomes the english list

Not that good. Sorry. Alot of changing needed to be done. 5.5.10. Ill post later with fixes needed

first off, you have way too many monsters
i'd recomend taking out the following
Invader of Darkness
The Fiend Megacyber
Byser Shock
twin-headed wolf x2
Winged Minion x2
Grave Protector
Kryuel x2

and adding
slate warrior (a very good 1900 potential 2400)
dark ruler hades
two more goblin king (its a lock when u get 2 on the feild)
dark necrofear
newdoria or dark jeriod (good for tomato, and it replaces kryuel)

i personally liked using puppet magic of the dark ruler (but thats just me...)
however, i like the idea of using pitchblack warwolf instead of jinzo (now thats originality!!)

Thanks,
Ill do this
-The Fiend Megacyber
-Byser Shock
-twin-headed wolf x2
-Winged Minion x2
-kryuel x2

+2x Goblin King
+Dark Jeroid
+Hades
+slate Wariors

I may try puppet magic

Here's My Deck As of Now:

Monsters:18
Dark Ruler Ha Des
Invader of Darkness
Blowback dragon
Pitch-Black Warwolf x3
Mystic Tomato x2
Magician of Faith x3
Night assailant x2
Grave Protector
Goblin King x2
Sangan
Kycoo The ghost Destroyer

Spell:13
Pot of greed
Nobleman of crossout x2
United We Stand
Reload x2
Dark Core
The Dark Door
Yami
Mask of The Accursed
Creature swap x2
Puppet Magic of Dark Ruler

Trap:10
Draining Sheild x2
Divine Wrath x2
Sakaretsu Armor x2
Raigeki break x2
Spell Vanishing

Total:40