So I'm reading the current novel and just can't seem to get into it, but I'm not sure why. About 3 chapters in I figure it out, most of the sentences are terribly worded to the point you can't really understand what in the heck the author means.

Now to be fair that sounds like most of my post. But then again I'm not an author getting paid for proper grammer. Also I'm finding an abundance of spelling errors, currently the most I have found on one page is three. Now keep in mind if I can find spelling errors then there is something really wrong.

While I'm not really dissing the book per say, I do find it not so good. I mean so far there is nothing really wrong with it, it's just ....hmmmmm like eating cardboard (no I don't really know what that's like). But I can imagine it would be not so swell.

Some examples of terrible grammer are like (example: guy and girl talking.
Girl takes a pull of her drink and says "yes".
Guy then takes another pull of his drink.

Huh? when did he take a "pull" of his drink? and what the heck is a pull?

Guy bangs on table with Gavel to quite everyone down, then when someone interupts the girl she bangs on the table with "the" gavel.

Huh? so does everyone have a gavel.

Now these might be small qualms to have, and then again I might just not understand the grammer and it could be right somehow... but... umm yeah...

So what does anyone else think.

I personally really liked the book. it really shows what a planet would go through in the current situation and a crazy mad man wanting to become powerful just adds to the fun. though i did have the same opinion as you in the beggining, i changed my thoughts when the book started to get going.

Afamiliablue, about how far in the book before you changed your mind? I'm only on like page 50 so far. Also did the wording seem kinda odd to you as well? I'm hoping it's not just me.

It's a good book. I've read one other book by the same author, and enjoyed it, as well. His writing style can be... interesting, but I've found that I've had little trouble understanding it.

I'm currently on page 106, ready to start Chapter 7. I can tell you
that things start to pick up on the trip to Galatea. That's all I'll
say. Keep reading. I think you'll start getting into it. It's a good
book, but it does take a while to get rolling. :)

Is there a redemption in the book?

No redemption. I REALLY like this author! I hope we see more
from him! :)

I have to agree the book seemed a bit odd in the beginning,things just didnt seem to fit right but the more I read the more I liked it and it does seem to have more real mechs in it than any of the other DA novels.For some strange reason the books seem to come out here in Canada about 2-3 weeks before the US so I read this sucker about 2 weeks ago and have just been waiting to see what others thought,

I like that book as well. Besides being a very interesting to read, it actially had the closest thing to spirit cat fiction so far ( one of the main charfacters is a nova cat). And thumbs up for the way author described nova cats :)

I liked it. Different from most MW:DA books but still good.

rgsniper1, it's not just you. I'm almost through reading Patriot's Stand and I have the same issues with language as you apparently do. Just about every page has at least one sentence where I just shake my head and think "That sounds so dumb/awkward/illogical/whatever." or "What the heck did that mean?"

More than that, however, I find the novel to be incredibly dull. I usually finish one of these MW:DA novels in less than a day, two if I'm busy with other stuff. But I've been working on PS for over a week now and just last night I set it aside to return to the book I had been reading before it came in the mail. I still have about 40 pages left and it took me more than three days to get that down from 50 pages left. Dull, dull, dull. I was so bored reading this book that I honestly don't know when I'll get around to finishing it. And that's a first for a CBT/MW:DA novel.

On top of that, the characters were very flat. To call some of the mercenaries one-dimensional would be too generous. Half of them pretty much disappear once Grace gets back from Galatea. And the villain is so over-the-top cartoonish that I just laugh whenever he is onscreen. Grace herself does little more than act as just another warm body in conversation scenes with the other characters. The combat scenes are so uninspired that I could do better using hand puppets.

Plotwise, it's not so bad, if a little pedestrian. A better author could have done a good job with this plot, I think. But Moscoe's efforts, while not the trainwreck of Delrio or Vardeman, just leave me cold.

Overall, nice to see IndustrialMods really get used as the poor man's battlemech.

Pet peeve: Stupid secondary Character names
Examples:
By temptations and by War: Hahn Sum Gui
Handsome Guy
Fortress of Lies:
Ginger Li
Gingerly
This one:
Betsy Ross
Yeah, like the woman in the story would take the name of the legegendary american flag maker.

Give it a break. I can do crud like that too
Biff M. Chalada -> Beef Enchilada
Not very funny is it.
These writers are supposed to be professionals. Act like it, get real names for you characters, not this cutesy carp.

Overall I thoght that the book was OK. My biggest complaint is the spoiler on the back. It does not seem to fit with what actually happens in the book.

The book is good. Very good. you just have to get to the point where the psychofreaknutballguy begins getting ruthless and the actual fighting starts.

While I didn't noticed the bad grammar or spelling in the book...
I still disliked it.
It started out fine but halfway through it... well it was like the editor was fired before the book was finished... the villian of the story became this cartoon character... heck, Lord Zorg from Buzz Lightyear made a better villian... the Red and Black Mechwarrior were idiots (and if it was so easy to buy a real battlemech then why hasn't some of the richer factions such as SS or BR bought them already?) Keystone Mechwarriors anyone?
I would have preferred Mech fu to giving the villians battlemech but stupid mechwarriors... that... that .... ARGGGGGHHHHHHH!

Aside from that they lumped Bannson's Raiders as a merc unit... I think it would have been more accurate if they referred to one of the BR's regiments instead of BR...

And did anyone else noticed the planet never did ask RotS for help?

Anyway that's my incoherent ramblings on the book. Take it from what its worth from a guy who like the Proving Ground Trilogy... (so they demonize Kerensky it was still enjoyable)